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Quentin
27th July 2005, 01:00
I am going to go home now and write more stuff, feel free to provide your positive or negative input about the story here.
Either is appreciated. Thanks.
Emmerdale001
27th July 2005, 04:41
Kill Bill Vol. 1 meets Leon. It's a good story overall.
I've read the first post and to tell you the truth, I was pleasantly surprised with it. I like the description of Alizée both a hunter and a girl. So powerfull as a huntress, and so week and delicate as a mere girl. :)
Quentin
27th July 2005, 17:04
Read the second post =)
Read the second post =)
Yes I will! I can't hardly wait! :thumbup:
D13U
27th July 2005, 19:06
2 comments from me.. Very good story, and David is definitely evil.
PayBays
27th July 2005, 19:29
2 comments from me.. Very good story, and David is definitely evil.
Are you finally....finally...finally getting my point back then!
His story is unbelievable!
Quentin
27th July 2005, 22:52
FYI - Story is updated.
PayBays
27th July 2005, 23:48
yeah you wrote a lot men!
Emmerdale001
28th July 2005, 06:31
Seems the FBI came in short-handed with the latest installment. I've talked to law enforcement types enough to know that if they suffered even one man down, they would have gotten everyone in there as soon as possible and flooded the whole area with officers and agents and helicopters for aerial support. If there's anything that provokes a fierce reaction from the FBI, local police, or state police, it's losing a man.
Quentin
28th July 2005, 06:51
Yeah, i weighed that issue heavily and justified it by making the event last less than a few minutes.
Quentin
29th July 2005, 19:08
Story is updated... I added from french dialog to the story, and I realized that some of you cant read french, so I added some rough translations below to french parts. Hope you can follow the flow of those events. Thanks for reading guys.
Backinblack
29th July 2005, 19:35
I'll translate the French dialogue into correct French if you want me to, Quentin.
Quentin
29th July 2005, 19:44
I am not that good at french so if you want to, go for it.. Its appreciated =)
FiEsTa
30th July 2005, 01:52
Lol I dont understand about what this thread actually is.
PayBays
30th July 2005, 01:53
Lol I dont understand about what this thread actually is.
It's about the story Quentin Made
( sorry forgot the name,but it's in the topic title )
Quentin
30th July 2005, 07:39
There is a duplicate thread on this forum with the exception of the "please do not post in this thread" instead of this one where as it says "comments thread"
This story was spawned from another thread about Alizee being a action hero or game hero... I was inspired to write the present short story when someone suggested that she be akin to "La Femme nikita". I found this intriguing and explored the idea with an openning sequence. It turned out good, so I roled with it, and developed an average plot with Alizee being the heroine of the story.
If you havent read it.. Please do, I am shooting for opinions... As I am a novice writer and want to get as much feed back as possible.
thanks
Quentin
2nd August 2005, 20:45
Story is updated, I am wrapping it up with another 2-3 posts. just FYI.
As Always.. I appreciate the comments and thanks for reading it.
It is done. I feel that I have nothing more to add to the story so this will be the last installment.
If you would like to add your comments and opinions, discuss aspects of the story, post them here.
Yes it has a happy ending.
PayBays
3rd August 2005, 00:08
Quentin i don't know how to say.But my English lacks so much,that i'm always stuck into my story,when it reaches the 14th Page
it sucks...
Quentin
3rd August 2005, 00:51
I have found that its harder to write in other languages... I would try writing your story in your language first and then work on getting it translated.
Thats what I hope gets done with my story. If someone on these boards was willing to trasnlate it, I would be delighted. The only problem is that it would be harder for me to ensure that the mood and feeling of the original story was preserved in the french version.
Anyways good luck, and you can always ask me how something should be written, maybe I can help with your english.
PayBays
3rd August 2005, 01:01
Yes that would be awesome.I still have trouble with finding the exact word,that gives my story some kinda touch
Quentin
3rd August 2005, 03:55
even though I am an amatuer writer, I am hoping that I can learn more about writing and stuff, I just started a few months ago. I have taken a few classes, but only have 1 published piece of work. This story is considered published... but not like the guides I wrote for world of warcraft.
PayBays
30th August 2005, 21:49
A yes FAQ/Story Guides
i wrote about 64 of them...published them on a site but the site never returned
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